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I provide professional freelance manuscript assessment, copyediting and proofreading services for writers of Christian fiction and non-fiction books, stories and articles. I also review Christian novels at www.christianreads.blogspot.com.

Not a Book Review. Just a Warning Against #BadWritingAdvice

Not a Book Review. Just a Warning Against #BadWritingAdvice

As a rule, I don’t think it’s appropriate to review a book based on only reading the Kindle sample.

But I recently found a book that was bad enough that unwary writers need to be warned against it … and I could tell just from the sample. The introduction promises a book in four parts, three of which are #BadWritingAdvice (and I couldn’t judge the fourth).

No, I’m not going to name the book. But I will tell you why it deserves this post.

First, the author offers hundreds of dialogue tags that can be used instead of “said”.

Top tip: use “said”.

Anything other than “said” is telling. If you want to add variety, don’t use a dialogue tag. Use an action beat, body language, or internal monologue. As Browne and King say:

When you’re writing speaker attributions the right verb is nearly always said. Verbs other than said tend to draw attention away from the dialogue.

Then the author offers hundreds (perhaps thousands) of adverbs to use with dialogue.

Apparently, adverbs add spice. That may be true, but spices have to be used carefully and in the right place to be effective: don’t use chilli where the recipe calls for paprika.

Top tip: don’t use adverbs to add spice to your dialogue tags.

Stephen King may or may not be correct, but I think he best expresses the common view:

The road to hell is paved with adverbs.

Next, the author moves onto how to explain feelings, emotions, and internal dialogue.

“Explain” is a synonym for “tell”, and all modern fiction authors know they are supposed to show, not tell. And modern fiction authors also know (or should know) that we do not use tags with internal dialogue.

Actually, there is no such thing as internal dialogue unless your character is telepathic or has a mental illness that means they hear voices (think Gollum and Smeagol). The correct phrase is internal monologue, because there is only one person in an internal conversation.

Top tip: if your dialogue is ambiguous, write better dialogue.

Browne and King have a view on this as well:

If you tell your readers she is astonished when her dialogue doesn’t show astonishment, then you’ve created an uncomfortable tension between your dialogue and your explanation … your readers will be aware, if only subconsciously, that something is wrong

Finally, the author moves onto body language and movement.

She didn’t give enough information in the sample to tell whether this information would be useful (i.e. accurate), or whether it’s as ill-advised as the previous three sections. If past performance predicts future behaviour, then I suspect this section is also #BadWritingAdvice.

If you happen to stumble across this book (or a book like it), please don’t buy it or read it or recommend it to your writing friends. Instead, read (or reread) Self-Editing for Fiction Writers by Renni Browne and Dave King, or any one of a number of other writing and editing guides.

They will all tell you to use said, avoid adverbs, and show, don’t tell.

(If you want my book recommendations, click here and check out my Amazon shop.)

Can I Use a Miraculous Healing in my Novel?

Dear Editor | Can I Use a Miraculous Healing in my Novel?

Last year, I published a post on using miracles in fiction.

After reading this post, one reader asked me an interesting question: what about healing? Can we have a character receive a miraculous healing … like a resurrection?

The short answer is yes, you can have a healing in Christian fiction.

But the longer and more complicated answer is that it has to be written with great care. A resurrection is a big miracle, so you have to follow the guidelines to writing miracles I covered in my previous post—you have to set up a world in which miracles happen, and you have to set the expectation of big life-giving resurrection miracles.

You also have to make sure the resurrection miracle (or its close cousin, the healing from a fatal disease miracle) is right for the story. It could be that sometimes characters go through hard times, pray for healing or resurrection, and don’t get their miracle (just like in real life). For some stories—perhaps many stories—that is the right and best answer.

Let me show you through examples from novels I’ve read. Yes, this post will have spoilers.

Grace in Strange Disguise by Christine Dillon

Grace in Strange Disguise is the story of Rachel, a physiotherapist and pastor’s daughter who has the perfect life … until she’s diagnosed with cancer. Her father and fiance pray for her healing. Rachel prays and fasts. But Rachel learns God isn’t a wizard in the sky, prayer isn’t a magic spell, and healing isn’t a matter of saying or doing the right things.

Instead, Rachel finds the true God of the Bible. Rachel also finds He has a purpose in taking her through the hard places of cancer. No, God doesn’t work the way Rachel or her father thought He should. But the result of doing things God’s way is far better.

Having Rachel healed through prayer would have been wrong, as that would have deprived Rachel (and the reader) of the opportunity to know God better. After all, we often learn more about God in the dark places than in the light.

Dana’s Valley by Janette Oke and Laurel Oke Logan

 

Dana’s Valley is a young adult novel narrated by a teenager (Dana) whose sister is diagnosed with a life-threatening disease. Dana and her family consistently pray for the sister’s healing but she does die. Dana is distraught and her faith is shaken: she’d asked God for a miracle, and he didn’t deliver.

Her mother says :

“Only God could have carried me through in the way that I needed in order to minister to Dana. I could never have managed it on my own. Never. … Only God could have helped us manage [finances] so well. … How much more could God have done for us? I’ve seen His hands holding us up every step of the way.”

Despite their prayers, Dana is dying. Her mother has an eternal view of Dana’s future that’s rarely seen in real life or in fiction:

“We don’t waste our prayers on salavaging life here—we’re asking for God to call to the life that’s eternal. And that’s what God has given to Dana. Life that won’t end. She’s almost made it through all the pain and arrived at the beginning. God has answered every prayer.”

This is a reminder that miracles don’t always look like we think they should. That God doesn’t always answer prayer in the way we expect Him to. But that’s nothing new: Jesus was the Messiah, but he wasn’t the answer they were looking for.

As Sure as the Dawn by Francine Rivers

As Sure as the Dawn is the final novel in The Mark of the Lion trilogy. The trilogy begins with a miracle: Jesus heals the son of the widow from Naim. Hadassah, the main character in the first two novels in the trilogy, is the daughter of the boy Jesus raised from the dead.

Rivers therefore sets up a world in which miracles happen. Big miracles. Resurrection miracles. The first two books are filled with miracles, including miracles of healing where Hadassah prays for a person, and that person is healed.

The third book has other miracles, including speaking in tongues, and a character who rises from the dead. But it works, because the story has already had two resurrection miracles (the widow’s son, and Jesus himself), as well as a host of “lesser” miracles.

To answer the original question:

Yes, you can have resurrection miracles—in real life and in fiction. But fictional resurrection miracles have to follow the same “rules” as other miracles. They have to be set up properly. And they have to serve the story.

Sometimes the right answer is that the character doesn’t get their miracle.

Why?

Because that’s how life works.

God, in his infinite wisdom, doesn’t always give us the answer we want. Sometimes He takes a long time to deliver the answer—whether it’s the answer we want or the answer we don’t want.

It’s a time of waiting, of patience, of testing our faith.

So we need for our characters to have to wait, to develop patience, to have their fictional faith tested. Because that’s one of the reasons people read fiction (consciously or subconsciously): to find out how other people cope with problems. That means seeing characters work through their problems, rather than having the author-as-God fix their problems in some fabricated deus ex machina resolution.

But if you’ve set your resurrection miracle up (that means you’ve foreshadowed it, not telegraphed it), and the resurrection is the best possible alternative for your story, then use it. Because there are times we need reminding that God is a God of miracles, small and big.

Can you think of any Christian fiction which included healing (or not healing) as a plot point? Did that work in the context of the story?

What is the Best Dictionary to use for fiction?

Dear Editor | What is the Best Dictionary to Use for Fiction?

One of the most important rules of editing is that a document needs to have correct and consistent spelling, grammar, and punctuation. How do we ensure correct and consistent spelling? We check in the dictionary.

But which is the best dictionary to use for fiction?

First, you can’t rely on the dictionary in Word. Or Grammarly. Or any other online software. Why not? Because each dictionary is different, and publishers will each have a standard dictionary they use. This will often be the dictionary recommended by their preferred style guide.

The standard style guide for fiction published in the United States of America is the 17th edition of the Chicago Manual of Style (CMOS). CMOS recommends the 11th edition of Merriam-Webster’s Collegiate Dictionary (MW).

Merriam-Webster regularly add new words to the online version of the dictionary, which means even the new 1 August 2019 print edition won’t be current for long.

The online edition will always be more current because it can be updated quickly and at almost no cost.

My print edition of Merriam-Webster’s was printed in 2014, which means it’s time to upgrade to the new 2020 edition (and yes, I’m fully aware it’s still 2019 as I write this). Note that these are both the 11th edition, despite the difference in printing date, and the inclusion of words such as emoji and clickbait in the 2020 edition.

This is further complicated by the fact there are multiple versions of Merriam-Webster’s, including:

  • The Unabridged version, which includes 470,000 words (available online via subscription)
  • The Collegiate version, also available online via subscription.
  • The print Collegiate version, which includes 225,000 definitions.
  • The free online version.
  • The free and paid Android and iPhone app versions based on the online Collegiate dictionary (with the main difference being the lack of advertisements in the paid version).

Some words can be found in the app version, but not in the online Collegiate or Unabridged versions. (Apparently the Unabridged edition doesn’t include All The Words). Words marked “new” in the Unabridged might not be in other versions until the next scheduled update. Print versions obviously lag online versions.

Merriam-Websters say the subscription-based Collegiate version is the most up-to-date version available.

Our Collegiate Dictionary database on our subscription Merriam-Webster Unabridged site (unabridged.merriam-webster.com) is the most up-to-date version of Merriam-Webster’s Collegiate Dictionary, Eleventh Edition. The online Collegiate is usually updated a few times a year.
Our free dictionary on Merriam-Webster.com was originally based on the Collegiate, but the two are no longer the same.

But which is the best dictionary to use for fiction?

Merriam-Webster recommend publishing professionals use the online version of the Collegiate Dictionary. You can find this on the Merriam-Webster Unabridged site (i.e. the paid subscription version).

If you’re writing in US English, then you may wish to subscribe to the online Collegiate version, or you may be happy using the website or hardcover versions. However, it’s worth asking your editor which version they are using so you know which is more likely to be current and correct.

Which dictionary do you use to edit fiction?

Writing Believable Christian Fiction

How to Write a Novel | Writing Believable Christian Fiction

Writing believable Christian fiction, especially writing what David Bergsland calls Redemptive Christian fiction, relates back to two of the most oft-quoted pieces of writing advice: write what you know, and show, don’t tell.

Write what you know.

We can’t write with accuracy, authenticity or believablility about a topic we don’t know, whether that is art history, motor racing, SEAL team training, or anything else. And this has the potential to become an issue if we were to try and write about a level of Christian experience we don’t know about personally.

However, we serve a mighty God. I might not be able to write from experience about how a Christian suffering from depression receives healing and uses her experience to help others, I know a God who understands suffering. Who understands being in the dark places. Who understands hopelessness—and the hope Christ brings.

Prayer, therefore, must be the foundation of whatever we write as Christians.

We need to ask God to guide our writing. I’m not saying any of us should be so bold (or arrogant) as to say that our words are God’s words: unless we’re quoting the Bible, we can’t say that. But spending time in God’s presence will allow us to know Him better, and therefore to better reflect Him in our writing. Fiction or non-fiction.

Nor should we judge other writers who seem to be writing at a “lower” level. Their writing may be a reflection of their personal Christian experience, in which case it’s our privilege to pray that God will show them more, and bring them closer to Himself.

Or they may be writing at that “lower” level because that is the place God has called them to, and those are the people God has called them to write for. I see too many Christian writers publicly judging other Christian writers for their writing choices.

  • Authors writing for the Christian market judging authors who write for the general market.
  • Non-fiction authors judging fiction authors for writing “lies”.
  • Literary fiction authors judging genre fiction authors for writing populist crap (of course, they usually mange to find a politer way of expressing themselves).
  • Genre writers judging romance writers for feeding inappropriate desires.
  • Clean romance writers judging . . . the list goes on.

Unless we know with 100% certainty that a particular author is going against God’s call by writing whatever genre they are writing, then we should not judge. Even if we do believe they are in the wrong, our best approach is through prayer, that God will work in their lives to lead them towards Himself. Telling them they are wrong isn’t going to motivate them to change.

Which brings me to the second major problem with writing Christian fiction:

Show, don’t tell.

Yes, this is another of those oft-quoted pieces of writing advice. And the problem with a lot of Christian fiction is that it tells where it should be showing. To tell is simply poor writing craft.

But a lot of writers don’t know better. They tell, because they don’t know how to show.

This, I believe, is also a reflection of the way we live our Christian lives. The Bible says:

The LORD does not look at the things man looks at. Man looks at the outward appearance, but the LORD looks at the heart.
– 1 Samuel 16:7

It is an unfortunate reality that many modern churches unintentionally encourage and reward members for looking at the outward appearance. “Proper” Christians wear the right clothing styles—not too short, not too tight, and not too much visible skin. They don’t wear too much makeup (or they don’t wear makeup at all). The women don’t have short hair. The men don’t have long hair. The don’t have tattoos, especially not visible tattoos. Clothes are clean and pressed. Jewelry is tasteful.

We bring our Bibles to church. We drive nice cars. We live in nice houses. We have nice families. We say nice things. We never admit to having difficulties in our relationships with our spouse, our family, with God. We never admit to the financial pressure we are under because of the need to have nice things, the right car, a house in the right part of town. We never admit that we’re showing a sanitised version of our lives, that we curate social media to only show the nice parts. That we’re acting.

Yes, As Christians, we are the ultimate in method acting: we play the part of the good Christian because we’ve twisted Jesus’s words in Luke 6:45:

The good man brings good things out of the good stored up in his heart, and the evil man brings evil things out of the evil stored in his heart. For out of the overflow of his heart his mouth speaks.

Yet instead of focusing on attitudes, we focus on the behaviour and pretend to ourselves that our behaviour (and that of our children) reflects our attitudes. And too much Christian fiction makes this mistake: that because the characters are *acting* like Christians, they must *be* Christians.

So we, as authors are *showing* Christian behaviour, but true Christianity goes deeper than that.

It’s also about Christ-like thoughts and attitudes:

Taking captive every thought to be obedient to Christ
– 2 Corinthians 10

I suspect we ignore these underlying attitudes and motivations in fiction because we can’t or don’t see them play out in real life. No matter how well we know our friends (or even our spouse), we don’t know their every thought. We don’t know their deepest darkest secret (although we might suspect it).

But this is the enormous advantage fiction has over real life: as authors, we can use deep perspective point of view to show a character’s underlying attitudes and motivations. We can show their outward actions, and their inward attitudes.

This is where writing craft becomes vital for writing believable Christian fiction.

It’s easy to show outward actions. It’s not easy to show inward attitudes, and many writers slip into the trap of telling through character thought. That leads to writers “info dumping” Christianity into your fiction. That will inevitably come across as preachy. Instead, weave the character’s Christian faith throughout the story, through their actions as much as through their words and thoughts. As St Francis of Assisi said,

Preach the gospel at all times. When necessary, use words.

Remember as well that there is a market for “Christ-lite” fiction. Non-Christians, Seekers, and Backsliders are unlikely to want to read Redemptive fiction . . . at least, not until they’ve experienced Christ for themselves.

If God can use The Da Vinci Code to bring people to Christ (yes, I’ve heard He can), he can certainly use your book.

What is Edgy and Diverse Fiction?

Dear Editor | What is Edgy and Diverse Christian Fiction?

One of the complaints about Christian fiction is that the novels are filled with cliche characters who don’t reflect real life: Mr Almost-Perfect meets Miss Practically Perfect, they overcome a minor doctrinal difference (are you a real Christian if you read the 1769 King James Version rather than the 1604 version?), and live happily ever after.

Others complain that the hero and heroine are always rich, good-looking, and successful, and their conflicts are #FirstWorldProblems. In other words, that the characters don’t reflect real life (however defined).

Many authors try and bring real life into the Christian fiction they write. Some brand this as “edgy” Christian fiction, as a way of separating their books in the market.

What is “Edgy” Christian Fiction?

First, we need to remember there is no universal definition for Christian fiction. I’ve discussed this before:

Edgy is an equally difficult term to define. In broad terms, my observations suggest “edgy” is a term applied to any Christian fiction that doesn’t fit the cookie-cutter fiction traditional publishers tend to put out (because publishing is a business, and following the formula is seen as the route to financial success).

Edgy can include:

  • Characters who have problems with alcohol or illegal drugs. Conservative Christian readers will consider any novel in which a character drinks alcohol to be edgy. Owning a vineyard is definitely edgy. Proper Christians, it seems, never touch alcohol. Not even in Holy Communion.
  • Characters who have problems with addictions such as gambling or pornography.
  • Characters who have been physically abused as children.
  • Characters who have been sexually abused.
  • Characters who have had abortions, or babies out of wedlock.
  • Divorced characters.

Unfortunately, these are real-life situations for many readers, Christian and otherwise. The world is full of hurting people who have been affected by these problems, either as the victim or the perpetrator. Jesus came to save the lost, and too many Christian novels pretend they don’t exist.

As such, there is a market for “edgy” Christian fiction, as readers with less than ideal backgrounds seek fiction that reflects their reality. Yes, sometimes this fiction pushes the envelope of what is typically considered Christian fiction. But that is probably an envelope that needs pushing (if you’ll excuse the bad analogy).

What is Diverse Christian Fiction?

Another envelope that needs pushing is diversity in Christian fiction. Most CBA novels from ECPA publishers have a lot in common:

  • They are set in the United States of America—the main exception is a small number of historical romances set in England, usually Regency or Edwardian England.
  • They feature predominantly white characters, although a growing number feature Hispanic main characters.
  • A smaller number feature people of Native American or African-American heritage, and even fewer feature other racial minorities such as Asian-American. Where novels do feature minorities, they are likely to be self-published or from a small press.
  • Most novels are non-denominational, although the characters are clearly Protestant (usually conservative evangelical) rather than Roman Catholic or Orthodox or some other Christian denomination.

There is room for the Christian fiction market to expand to include characters who represent a broader cross-section of the Christian church.

This includes:

  • Fiction set outside the United States and Regency England.
  • Historical fiction representing nations and cultures other than the United States and England or Scotland.
  • Fiction from the point of view of indigenous peoples.
  • Fiction from the point of view of non-white immigrants.

This gives more of us the chance to see ourselves on the page. Yes, I include myself in “diverse”. I’m from New Zealand, and there is a dearth of fiction featuring Kiwi characters or Kiwi settings, much less Kiwi characters in New Zealand.

There are authors writing and publishing edgy fiction, diverse fiction (and even edgy and diverse fiction), but I’d like to see more.

I’d especially like to see more edgy and diverse fiction from the large traditional publishers.

Would you?

 

Publishing Tips

Understanding the Paths to Publishing

All authors need to understand the various paths to publishing so they can make the best decision for them (and not spend their life savings on publishing through a vanity press that promises the world and ends up paying $2 in royalties).
If you decide to pursue a big-name traditional publisher, then you will probably need a literary agent. If you’re writing for the Christian market, you’ll want a Christian agent:
You might get a offered contract with a small traditional publisher. It appealing, but is it a good idea?

Writing Scams

There are a lot of scams in the writing world. What should writers pay for, and what should they be wary of?

Self-Publishing

If you decide to self-publish, then you are responsible for the entire publishing process:

Book Cover Design

You’ll need a book cover. Here are my design tips: Book Cover Design

Front and Back Matter

If you choose to self-publish, then you’ll need to include certain information in the front and back of your books: your front and back matter:

Copyright

As content creators, we need to understand the basics of copyright. This series of posts includes basic information about copyright so we can ensure we’re not infringing on someone else’s copyright:

Formatting

Vellum

Vellum is downloadable Mac-only software that makes it easy to format ebooks and paperbacks. People who use it swear by it (and as a reader I can confirm it produces beautiful ebooks). Kristine Kathryn Rusch recommends the print copies as well, saying Vellum is fast and easy, and produces quality books.

Joel Friedlander’s Book Templates

Joel’s book design templates* make it easy to format a professional ebook or paperback in Word or InDesign.

Draft2Digital

Draft2Digital* provides free ebook formatting, as well as distribution to Amazon and all major online retailers. They also offer printing services.

Scrivener

Scrivener users swear by Scrivener for formatting ebooks. I’m not yet a Scrivener convert, so don’t have an opinion. But if you use Scrivener, it’s worth checking out their formatting options before paying for something else.

*Note: these are affiliate links, which means I earn a small commission if you click my link and make a purchase. This doesn’t cost you anything.
Copyright: Image by StockUnlimited

Dear Editor | Why Should I Publish with a Traditional Publisher?

I was recently cruising one of the Facebook writing groups when an interesting question came up:

Why should I publish with a small traditional publisher?

I’ve partly covered this before, in Dear Editor | Should I Publish with a Small Press? But one group member made some good points about what a good traditional publisher will do:

  • Pay an advance to the author.
  • Employ editors with a track history of acquiring and publishing bestselling titles.
  • Employ competent line editors, copyeditors, and proofreaders.
  • Employ cover designers and formatters with experience publishing bestselling titles.
  • Employ an in-house sales team directly selling to thousands of booksellers through dozens of national and international channels.

If the traditional publisher doesn’t do most or all of these things, then what is the benefit to the author? The author grants the publisher the exclusive right to publish and distribute their book in exchange for the publisher taking most of any future profit, and paying lower royalty rates than the author could earn from self-publishing.

Ironically, said group member manages a vanity press which does not pay advances or employ editors, and distributes books though IngramSpark and Baker & Taylor. Pot, meet kettle.

Having said that, I agree with the comments.

I have a list of over 170 publishers of Christian fiction. There are a small number who meet all the criteria of a traditional publisher: they have a team of editors and designers who have worked on bestselling and award-winning books, and they have an extensive sales team actively selling books into retail chains.

Major traditional publishers pay advances, and royalties (if the book earns out the advance). Typical royalties are 15% of the net price (i.e. the price the publisher was paid) per paper book sale, and a little more for ebooks.

But these publishers don’t take submissions directly from authors.

They choose to work exclusively with a small number of literary agents specialising in the Christian market. Getting a literary agent is hard, and getting one of the limited number of publishing spots with a major traditional publisher is even harder.

My list also has a large number of small traditional publishers.

A couple of these are owned by authors who have been published by one or more of the major traditional publishers, and the quality of the books they publish reflects this professionalism. They are well edited and have covers that look like covers from the major traditional publishers.

Small traditional publishers don’t usually pay advances but do pay above-market royalties (I’ve heard figures of 25% of net on paper sales, and 50% on ebook sales).

The rest of the small publishers on my list mean well, but their books are substandard.

The writing and editing isn’t great (I’ve read better first drafts). Their covers are not consistent with current genre trends. As a result, the books rarely reach any significant level of sales.

What these small publishers don’t have is the sales channels. They don’t have national-level relationships with Barnes & Noble or Walmart or Target … or even Amazon. They might have relationships with the owners of local bookstores (Christian or not), but that relationship will sell tens of books, not hundreds or thousands.

Their main distribution platform is going to be Amazon and the other ebook stores, and IngramSpark (for getting paper books stocked at Barnes & Noble online). They’ll also get listings in the online catalogues.

And that’s exactly the same distribution as a self-published author can get for themselves for the price of the IngramSpark upload fee (i.e. around $50, and free for members of the Alliance of Independent Authors).

Coincidentally, that’s exactly the same distribution as many of the “self-publishing” companies offer … except they charge hundreds or thousands of dollars for the privilege.

(Read more about vanity publishing here.)

And that’s why I believe authors have two choices:

1. Get their writing and platform to a standard where they can attract the attention of a top literary agent who has solid relationships with the major traditional publishers.

(Read more about how to find a Christian literary agent here.)

2. Self-publish.

And when I say “self-publish” I don’t mean spending hundreds or thousands of dollars with a “self-publishing company” (or hybrid publisher, or partnership publisher, or any of the dozens of other names I’ve seen them call themselves). Unfortunately, these type of companies make up the majority of the publishers on my list.

When I say “self-publish”, this is what I mean:

  • Write the book.
  • Work with critique partners to refine the plot and character arcs (or hire me for a manuscript assessment).
  • Work with beta readers to further revise and refine the story.
  • Work with an editor to polish the story. You might need a couple of editors e.g. a developmental editor and a copyeditor.
  • Find a cover designer with a proven track record in your genre,
  • Format your book for publication (e.g. buy Vellum or format free through Draft2Digital).
  • Create accounts on the major online bookstores and upload their book for sale (free everywhere except IngramSpark, which is around $50 unless you have a discount code).
  • Register copyright with the US Copyright Office ($35).

In return, self-published authors get royalties of 70% for (most) ebooks priced between $2.99 and $9.99, and 35% on other ebook sales. Royalties on paper books will depend on the cost of production and the sales price. However, the author doesn’t pay anything up front and isn’t required to purchase any copies (although they can purchase at a discount).

Authors also need to create an author platform, but every author needs that—the major traditional publishers are unlikely to consider an author who doesn’t at least have a professional-looking website and social media profiles.

(As an aside, I recently had the owner of a small press (not one of the good ones) challenge me as to why I didn’t “recommend” her publisher. My answer is that I don’t recommend any product or service I haven’t got personal experience with – which means I don’t recommend any publisher.)

So why should I publish with a small traditional publisher?

The one reason I can think of for first-time authors to publish with a small press is that traditionally publishing through a small press grants them the right to enter some writing contests—some contests for published books require that self-published authors show evidence of $2,000 or $4,000 in sales before they can enter. However, I’ve judged some of these contests and can assure you that being “traditionally published” is no guarantee of quality.

Otherwise, I recommend authors do their homework and carefully consider their publishing options.

Are you published with a small press? What was your rationale for that decision?

Plot and Structure

How to Write A Novel | Plot, Structure, and Characterisation

The foundations of a good novel are genre (which I discuss here), plot, structure, and characterisation.

If you’re writing (or have just written) your first novel, I suggest reading Tips for writing your first novel.

If you’re writing Christian fiction, you may want to consider these questions:

(And while we’re discussing Christian fiction, Please Don’t Criticise Christian Fiction Writers.)

Plot and Structure

Randy Ingermanson states the essentials of fiction are plot, character, theme and building a credible story world. However, plot and structure are inevitably intertwined, so we will discuss them together.

Another common question is around length:

Structuring Your Novel

There are a range of excellent tools to help authors plot a good story with a structure that doesn’t drag. These include:

Great tools for plotting your novel from @JamesScottBell, @KMWeiland, @MichaelHauge, @SnowflakeGuy (aka Randy Ingermanson) #WriteTips #AmWriting Share on X

Here are some of my favourite books on plot and structure:

(Note: these are Amazon affiliate links, but you should also be able to find these books at your favourite online or real-life bookstore.)

Scene Structure

There is also the micro-structure: the scene. Yes, scenes have structure.

Tropes

If you write romance, you may wish to consider which tropes you use, as tropes are a form of plot shorthand:

Characterisation

Finally, there is the all-important question of characterisation.

What plot, structure, or characterisation questions do you have? Leave a comment, and I’ll do my best to help.

 

 

Cover Image - Write Better by Andrew T Le Peau

Book Review | Write Better by Andrew T Le Peau

I’ve recently returned form the 2019 Omega Writers Conference in Sydney, Australia. Our keynote speaker was US literary agent Steve Laube, who inspired and challenged us all to pursue excellence in our writing.

He also talked about reading. Specifically, he pointed out that we shouldn’t restrict ourselves to reading (or watching) things we agree with. We should also read articles and books we don’t agree with, because they can expand our thinking by showing us alternative points of view.

Write Better had some ideas I disliked or disagreed with.

Le Peau even appeared to contradict himself on a couple of points. But it’s definitely a book worth reading, because the good far outweighs the less good.

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I found three main faults with the book. First, Le Peau points out the importance of a great introduction as a way of engaging the reader, but I found his introduction somewhat boring. Second, he discloses that parts of this book have been taken from his blog, then goes on to caution the reader against sharing too much of their book online. Hmm.

Finally, I think the structure of the book doesn’t entirely work—he talks about the craft of writing, the art of writing, the spirituality of writing, then has five not-quite-related appendicies. Parts of the book read more like a collection of related blog posts rather than a planned book. The content is great. It’s just that it doesn’t always hang together as an overall whole.

But don’t let that analysis leave you thinking this book is an automatic pass. There is a lot of good information in Write Better, and it certainly got me thinking. And that’s the point.

We need to think, and being faced with ideas we disagree with forces us to think in a way reading the agreeable books doesn’t.

Let’s start with my least favourite thought-provoking idea:

If we want to keep our thinking sharp, we need to exercise. Yes, I know. Exercise is anathema to many writers. But Karen Posta, president of the American Academy of Clinical Neuropsychology says vigorous physical exercise is the only activity known to trigger the birth of new neurons. To be in top shape mentally, we have to be in shape physically.

Yes, it makes sense. It doesn’t mean I have to like it.

Many of Le Peau’s ideas are relevant to speakers (e.g. pastors), not just writers.

For example, he says:

While opening with a strong, compelling story is always a good option, be sure the story is consistent with your main point as well as your target audience.

How many times have you heard a pastor start a sermon with a fun or funny story that ends up having nothing to do with the subject of his sermon? Or how many times have they started with a Bible reading that’s not related to their main theme? You might get there in the end, but it’s muddy because your reader (or listener) is expecting one thing, and you deliver another.

This leads to another vital question: who is your audience?

Write for (or preach to) a specific audience. Who do you want to reach, and why? In preaching, preach to the audience (congregation) you have, not the audience you’d like to have.

He makes another point that I definitely subscribe to: KISS. Keep it simple, stupid. He says:

We often think that sophisticated vocabulary makes us seem more impressive and intelligent [but] fancy vocabulary was not more persuasive than simple words even in scholarly writing.

I suspect this is because some people don’t understand the sophisticated vocabulary and can better be persuaded by simple words that are easier to understand because there is no room to debate alternate meanings.

Stephen King says any word you have to look up in a thesaurus is the wrong word. I’d go one step further and say any word you have to look up in a dictionary is the wrong word. Le Peau says:

If you only want to connect with other experts and specialists, fine. Go ahead and sound pretentious. Otherwise, KISS.

Le Peau is also in favour of KISS when it comes to our subject matter:

If you can’t explain the main concept of your piece in thirty seconds, you are probably in trouble.

Not least because if you can’t explain it in thirty seconds, your reader (or listener) will get confused over what is your main point.

Le Peau also covers how to make our message memorable using techniques like alliteration, analogy, metaphor, and even cliche. He reminds us to use subtle repetition to make our point stick (a technique often used to encourage us to believe lies), and to use stories:

Facts touch our minds. Stories touch our whole person—our emotions,our desires, what we remember from the past and what we hope for the future. Stories tell us who we were, who we are, and who we can be.

Yes, those points all came from the writing section, which I found the strongest. But Le Peau also makes some pertinent observations about author platform:

We don’t seek to build a platform for ourselves but for our message—so it can be heard.

On that basis, if we’re sharing the message God has given us, then building a platform is God-serving, not self-serving.

Do we believe we have something to say? Then building a platform is as proper as seeking to write.

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Le Peau believes it best if authors have spent two to five years building a platform before sending in their first proposal. Sure, he’s talking as a career employee in a traditional Christian publishing house, but the same guidance surely holds true for self-published authors.

As an aside, Le Peau also makes an interesting point about preaching:

Preaching is not about [the preacher] or about well he does. It is about whether or not the Spirit shows up, and that’s the Spirit’s decision, not his. His job is to preach faithfully.

The same can be said for leading worship, taking communion, or any other church service.

Finally, Le Peau makes some interesting points in light of the fact that most of the world’s Christian publishing industry is centred in the USA:

Approximately 80 percent of the world’s population lies outside the West. Over half of all Christians now live outside the West.

So if we’re only writing for Western Christians (or, worse, Christians in the USA), then we’re missing most of the market. We’re certainly not fulfilling the Great Commission.

As you can see, there is a lot more good in Write Better than bad.

As such, it’s an excellent book for Christian nonfiction writers … which is most of us, as even fiction writers write nonfiction blog posts.

Thanks to IVP Press and NetGalley for providing a free ebook for review.

About Write Better

Writing is not easy. But it can get better.

In this primer on nonfiction writing, Andrew Le Peau offers insights he has learned as a published author and an editor for over forty years, training, guiding, and cheering on hundreds of writers. Here are skills that writers can master―from finding strong openings and closings, to focusing on an audience, to creating a clear structure, to crafting a persuasive message.

With wide-ranging examples from fiction and nonfiction, Le Peau also demystifies aspects of art in writing such as creativity, tone, and metaphor. He considers strategies that can move writers toward fresher, more vital, and perhaps more beautiful expressions of the human condition.

One aspect of writing that rarely receives attention is who we are as writers and how writing itself changes us. Self-doubt, fear of criticism, downsides of success, questions of authority, and finding our voice are all a part of the exploration of our spirituality as writers found in these pages. Discover how the act of writing can affect our life in God.

Whether you’re a veteran writer, an occasional practitioner, a publishing professional, or a student just starting to explore such skills, Le Peau’s wit and wisdom can speed you on your way.

You can read the introduction to Write Better Below:

Mechanics of Writing

How to Write a Novel | Mechanics of Writing, Revising, and Editing

This post is a compilation of posts on writing, revising, and editing fiction.

Mechanics of Writing

Plot and Structure

Most novels follow the classic three-act structure. Different writing instructors teach this in different ways. Here are a few:

Scenes also have structure:

Point of View

Point of view is one of the most common issues I see with first-time fiction writers: Understanding Point of View

If you don’t understand point of view, then I recommend reading Characters and Viewpoint by Orson Scott Card.

Show, Don’t Tell

Show, don’t tell is an oft-quoted rule that isn’t always clearly defined:

If telling is a problem for you, then I recommend reading Understanding Show Don’t Tell (And Really Getting It) by Janice Hardy.

Common Writing Questions

These articles were all inspired by questions I’ve been asked online or in person, or issues I’ve seen in manuscripts I’ve worked on or novels I’ve read.

Common Revision Questions

Common Editing Questions

Editing questions fall into two main areas: the big-picture “why” questions, and the more detailed “how do I …” questions:

How Do I …

These tend to be style questions. As such, there is no right or wrong answer. It will depend on the style guide you are using:

My favourite books on self-editing are:

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